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 Posted - 2008/07/08 : 21:09:15
Hey, I'm a total amateur when it comes to writing music but it'd be nice if I could get some feedback on a song. You can hate it, but be constructive if you're going to critiscize it, which I'm sure it will get a lot of as I'm just a n00b.
http://www.mediafire.com/?u9wnijtwmmd
No vocals yet but I'd still like some feedback on this version and maybe get some tips from more experienced writers. Thanks.
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Jax
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Posted - 2008/07/08 : 21:11:57
ill have a listen now
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Edited by - Jax on 2008/07/08 21:27:18 |
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Posted - 2008/07/08 : 21:13:59
:] Done.
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Jax
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Posted - 2008/07/08 : 21:36:10
Not much i can say really as its above the level i can produce at.
Few things i picked up on though were the kick, to me it doesnt sound like it fits with the tune. The percussion seems like it overpower the synth a bit too.
The tune itself is pretty wicked, nice flow and its really catchy
Better to await the advice of ppl who know what they are talking about though :)
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Posted - 2008/07/08 : 21:41:32
Well an experienced producer's advice is valuable but so is a listener's. Thanks for the feedback. Do you think a more prominent kick or a more bass-heavy kick would work better?
And I do think I need to at least turn down the hi-hat and yeah, the percussion needs to be mixed in a little better but I'm not sure what to do with it...
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Jax
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Posted - 2008/07/08 : 21:56:44
I usually have a punchy kick and an off beat bass line which fills out the bass'y freq's. Im clueless on bass if its on the kick though.
I can hear your kick is getting lost in the mix, I tend to just let the percussion and a short part of the synth play on a loop and drag n drop loads of kicks into the sampler and see what sounds good.
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Samination
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Posted - 2008/07/08 : 22:44:27
starts out very dutch, but ends very japanese, how the hell? :D
If you just didnt touch the setup (except tweaks ofcourse) and make it longer, i wouldnt mind mixing this
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bulby_g
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Posted - 2008/07/09 : 18:57:54
It's not bad mate. Bit messy production wise.
First of all Start by getting a better kick. This one just gets lost in the mix and turning it up wont really help.
You are letting all your riffs and everything block up your low end so the bass isn't getting through.
Basically... everything but the kick and Bass should have the low end sweeped off with a gentle curve using an EQ. The best thing to do is play the track and just sweep the bass off of each sound untill the sound starts to get thin, push it back a touch so the sound isn't thinned out and leave it there. This will create the space needed for your kick and bass.
There is no rule to say "you should sweep this much off thisd sound" but be aiming at 175 hz odd +. Like I say though, there is no hard rule on this!. I find sometime it's nice to take the EQ off of a few sounds in a breakdown if you have no bass bits playing as it makes the track more alive. Gotta find a sneaky way to do this without effecting the bass/kick and without just blatently knocking it off at a dodgy point. ;)
You cain the same bit of track for too long and it kinda gets boring. What you need is something more in the breakdowns and maybe some bleeps and FX on an intro and/or brindge (whatever). Just change it up a bit more. :)
Keep it up though. definitely shows promise!
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Edited by - bulby_g on 2008/07/09 19:00:19 |
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Posted - 2008/07/09 : 22:05:10
Thanks bulby. I've taken a lot of advice form this thread and edited the song a bit. I didn't add any new effects in the intro or breakdowns, but once I get home from vacation I'll be adding a girl reaching orgasm during the breakdown, building until the cut-off. It'll come out of nowhere and definitely be different and a change from the usual, if you know what I mean, and it might grab a smile or a laugh from unsuspecting listeners. But thanks for all the feedback and tips, it's really helped.
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