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Lynny
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Hungary
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 Posted - 2007/05/15 : 17:34:25
Hi!
Finally i managed to finish my latest tune, the Lonely heart! My friend helped at the engineering. I made the vocal at home, it would be better at a studio, but there it is...
I hope U will enjoy it! Plz, give some feedback! Thx!
www.soundclick.com/bands/songInfo.cfm?bandID=438031&songID=5345987
(U can listen to the hi-fi version without registering.)
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Lynny
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Hungary
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Posted - 2007/05/15 : 17:54:55
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/songInfo.cfm?bandID=438031&songID=5345987
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bulby_g
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United Kingdom
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Joined: Apr, 2004
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Posted - 2007/05/15 : 19:59:48
Shows loads of promise, well done :)
Is written really well but the production needs some work.
The whole track sounds a bit too dry,
The bass sounds too wide or something...,
The vocals really cut into the low end of the track you need to filter that out and brighten them up as well,
Vocals could use a nice big delay on them too,
The kick doesn't sit low enough.
Work on these things and it should improve it quite a bit.
Good work though.
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Ionosphere
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United Kingdom
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Posted - 2007/05/16 : 12:20:02
The Bulbz is right.
It's well written and I really like it but he's also right about the production.
If you try his suggestions it'll polish it up nicely.
Right, I'm going to have another listen. 
*edit*
PM'd you.
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eTron
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United States
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Joined: Oct, 2002
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Posted - 2007/05/16 : 22:06:50
Exactly what they said.
A lot of potential though. Keep us updated. :)
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eddiewould
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New Zealand
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Joined: Jun, 2004
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Posted - 2007/05/17 : 20:52:03
Wow!
Love the vocals and melody. Very good songwriting!!!
Only things I would change:
* EQing on the vocals - as mentioned before they are interfeering with the bass etc. A touch of delay on the vocals can do wonders too.
* Synth could be richer and thicker - the melody is good, but the sound/preset could be more interesting. Either that, or add a second synth (layering).
This has the potential to be an absolute stormer of a tune!
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