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ryan1993
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 Posted - 2009/01/16 : 19:23:56
Im new 2 da scene and i would appreciate a lil feedback on my tune so far plz.
http://rapidshare.com/files/184470116/RW_-_Random_Hardcore.mp3.html
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Mortis
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Posted - 2009/01/16 : 21:42:44
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ryan1993
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Posted - 2009/01/16 : 21:54:09
Y dont u learn wot feedback is m8 and den u can actually submit sum? Ill save u time going on wikipedia and give u da basics. Feedback is were u tell people how there music is in a constructive way and tell them how 2 improve it and wot needs improving. Not a picture of a bastard cat...
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Mortis
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Posted - 2009/01/16 : 22:12:30
Feedback hey...without going on wiki I'll try my best:
You track is dull, it doesn't do anything. The lead is weak, it lacks imagination and basic structure. The track over all lacks imagination and structure, you have no bass line, the percussion is crap. The mix down is so bad and sounds so amaturish I can imagine it being made on an Amega. I would hazard a guess that most people would laugh at it rather than dance to it...but not laugh at it in a "Weird Al' Yankovic kind of way I mean laugh at it in a deragoatory way.
Also, feedback is not limited to music and anyone who types blue text on a blue background really needs to have a think about that they are doing before trying to give "attitude" to other people.
Was that ok?
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ryan1993
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Posted - 2009/01/16 : 22:28:20
Not really cos u never said how 2 improve...
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tru bass
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Posted - 2009/01/16 : 22:30:43
mortis dont be such a wanker i thought you were better than that.
it needs alot of work doing to it. try finding the kevin willow tutorials on youtube and watch them...
also try making tunes out of chords
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ryan1993
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Posted - 2009/01/16 : 22:31:39
ive checked out kev willows tutorials and thanx 4 chord info.
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Mortis
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Posted - 2009/01/16 : 22:34:46
Ok then,
Listen to other tracks and get a feel for their structure and grab some ideas (don't copy them or you'll get lost in the mire of bland tracks that are going around these days). This way you'll get a feel of structure and maybe some inventivenes will start to creep in. The lead sound itself is pretty weak but that's probably down to the VST your using - look around for others to improve on the sound. The riff itself is dull - watch Kev Willow's youtube stuff for pointers and ideas - he's shit hot.
You really need to add a bass to the track as that along with the kick and good percussion is what drives the track along. Mixdown is hard to learn, get the basics down first and the mixdown will come in time.
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ryan1993
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Posted - 2009/01/16 : 22:35:50
thanx and sorry 4 bein cocky 2 u.
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Mortis
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Posted - 2009/01/16 : 22:39:29
quote:
Originally posted by tru bass:
mortis dont be such a wanker i thought you were better than that.
I don't think I am being a wanker. I've posted my honest opinion of it by way of a comedy picture - he came at me with attitude and I've told him what I think of it in words...hardly been a wanker is it?
As he's now asked me what I think needs to be improved I've told him just that.
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tru bass
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Posted - 2009/01/16 : 22:48:10
quote:
Originally posted by Mortis:
quote:
Originally posted by tru bass:
mortis dont be such a wanker i thought you were better than that.
I don't think I am being a wanker. I've posted my honest opinion of it by way of a comedy picture - he came at me with attitude and I've told him what I think of it in words...hardly been a wanker is it?
As he's now asked me what I think needs to be improved I've told him just that.
if youd just uploaded a track thats one of your first then you dont need people to tell you its a 'fail'.. all you want to hear is how to improve it (which you have done now), it may have meant to have been having a laugh but it didn't come across as that at first.
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Mortis
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Posted - 2009/01/16 : 22:54:49
He didn't ask how to improve he asked for feedback and my feedback was a "fail", pretty simple I thought 
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tru bass
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Posted - 2009/01/16 : 22:58:13
your not giving in are you!
i suppose though 
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